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My audition for the tournament over at #SMOCT - didn't want to harass you with a huge amount of pages, so I thought I'd just put them all in one place!

Hope you all like, and cross your fingers for me! It'll be an awesome chance to practice doing comics if I get in!

Also, I realize there are a few toning flaws - hopefully, I'll work that out tomorrow. :D

EDIT

Changed the audition into a flash flipping book! Also did the story extra option for the sweet prizes. I know I'm a horribe writer, so you'll have to pardon me! :giggle:

Want to make one of these yourself? Here's a link to the template I used: [link] :D It's a little tough to get the hang of if you're a flash moron like me, but definitely not impossible!
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:iconarynchris:
Ooo, I like the additions at the end... and it makes sense.
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:iconinkscribble:
Thank you so much!
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~DaineN Jul 21, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Nice! The Freestyle script at the end is a little hard to read in large quantities (maybe cause I'm half blind).

Looking forward to more of your tournament submissions!
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:iconinkscribble:
Thanks! My first trial at comic'ing a fight scene! I've been breaking out the final two volumes of RG Veda (which boasts my favourite fight scenes EVER) for inspiration, which has been really fun and educational, so hopefully I will not to make the disappoint! :D
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~DaineN Aug 1, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
I'm sure you wont :D
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~Kibate Jul 18, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
ah, good think i decided to check out the audition once more before i finished the final draft of my storyboard, i will have to change a bit of the script now XP

but why change it into a flash? (i don't like slideshow things...but the flipping book thing is nice XP)
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:iconinkscribble:
(And I should amend that by saying that what I said about being bombarded by deviants with comics is NOT a hard and fast rule and WAS NOT DIRECTED AT YOU! Your comic is GORGEOUS, and you've organized it BEAUTIFULLY! I love the downloadable option, it's brilliant!)
(I should also amend 'each of my opponents' by saying 'if I have any after you're finished kicking my ass!' :giggle: I'm SO EXCITED to see Eris animated, I can't even TELL you!)
I also wanted to ask you two things:
1) DarkM's powers aren't quite native to her, right? Like, she wasn't born with them, but sort of learned to harness them?
2) May I add a few TEENSY TINY embellishments to her outfit? You'll BARELY notice them, I swear, and I think you'll really like the effect. I'm thinking a waistband and pleats on her skirt (although she may already have those) and giving her collar a polo shirt thing - with two little white buttons, so that it's not overwhelming. Basically, the embellishments will simply look as though you're looking at her outfit closely and noticing a few details you hadn't before. The cut of the skirt won't change a bit, and neither will the cut of the top.
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~Kibate Jul 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
By the way, i DO realize its kind of ironic that her transformation phrase, like everyone elses, is "make up" even though she doesn't wear any^^" (if i ever should do a transformation scene i think i will make make-up appear on her face and then she smears it off XP)
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:giggle: I don't think 'make up' necessarily refers to makeup in the case of senshi transformations. I think she just wanted something that vaguely conveyed getting fancied up which was more feminine than 'transform'. Naoko's Japanese and clearly doesn't speak English all that well. Remember 'Star Gentle Uterus'? I still crack up even typing that.

It would be totally cute, though - just as a pun. :D
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~Kibate Jul 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Oh, i never took it personally, about the looking-at-every-page-alone thing, don't worry^^"

1) Something like that, yes.
To be exact: The king(like endymion) and the sailor of that planet had two daughters. The first one inherited the powers of her mother. However since the older one already got that ability the younger daughter(darkmatter)didn't had any native powers. So the king banned her from the castle. Later on she met her mothers guardian(who later on died, thats why i never mentioned her in the reference) and told her, since her father never bothered to asign her a planet, she can be the guardian of whatever she want. So she somehow got the darkmatter power.

2) I guess that waistband and pleats on the skirt are ok. BUT I'm ABSOLUTELY against that shirt thing. First of all, i HATE polo shirts and every kind of buttons on clothes. If you already drew them, erase them! (sorry, i have something like a phobia against buttons on clothes.) But there is another reason too. Her outfit IS actually suppose to look that plain. Not only because i like plain clothes XP but also because of her personality.
(explaination: Since she got thrown out of the kings palace at a very very young age, she grew up in the slums. After she awoke her sailor powers she got a similar outfit to the other sailors, pretty much like sailor mars with short hair, even with makeup and everything. However since she didn't like it because she thinks only rich and therefore greedy evil people look beautiful she ripped off those things and washed the makeup away. So only her skirt, her shirt and the sailorcollar remain. And her shoes... The cloak is actually not part of her native outfit, she added it later on)

heh, i noticed that too. Even though the color scheme is similar between our two senshis, the amount of detail is totally different. Yours got like details all over the place and mine almost none XP

By the way, in close up views i will draw all the details of your characters too, but i obviously won't draw them in fast paced animations^^"

Oh, i've got a question. Not an important one so i wasn't going to ask, but since we already talk
if your guardian girl gets knocked out, does her form she currently is in remain, or does she revert back to the human form or to the wolf form? If possible i would want her to become a human then, but i want to keep it canon of course so whatever you say is ok^^
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